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Jaap STIJL's avatar

Lovely! I really like how the poem moves from something huge and unreachable (Jupiter, the moon) into very intimate, domestic choices like hair, scissors, tea. That shift feels honest, like the way desire and restraint actually coexist. Some of the strongest moments for me are when you stay with the body and the objects rather than explaining the feeling. The ending especially stayed with me: choosing warmth over impulse felt earned.

rena's avatar

Your remarks are a treasure, thank you, Jaap 🌻

Wifa Hasan's avatar

Adoring this heartfelt piece as well; though at the moment, you're in anxiety, your emotions are raging.

And yes, a cup of tea, why not!

l'll send my warmest hugs for you too, by then. Be fine my dear, always. Hugs. 🤍🫂

rena's avatar

My dear Wifa, you and a cup of tea help all the time 🤍🫂

Wifa Hasan's avatar

Ohh my dear, my tears, thank you. 🥹🫂

Paul Dotta's avatar

Jupiter embodies the Tao well.

C.J. Heck's avatar

Intrigue is always interesting. Well-done, rena.

Nazish Nasim's avatar

There is an alluring mystery to this, Rena. With the celestial bodies making it grand and beyond reach, and then culminating it like a soft whisper. Beautiful

rena's avatar

Thank you, dear Nazish 🌻🧡

Cathy Joseph's avatar

I love your expression of smaller days when the silent rage begins to whisper - I have experienced those. Tea is not always the answer, but it sure does help.

Thank you for the beautiful poem, Rena!

rena's avatar

Thank you so much, Cathy 🌻

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rena's avatar

🌻 Thank you 🧡